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Excerpt from a Romance – The Twesome Loop…

January 29, 2015
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One of my work in progress novels has a romance/reincarnation theme. The narrative follows two time periods. This excerpt is from 1894. Gabriella was forced into a marriage with an older man, William by her father in an effort to gain social status. She falls in love with William’s younger brother, Arthur and their relationship has dire consequences. This excerpt finds William transporting his young wife to Italy.

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The Twesome Loop

Chapter Eight – The Journey

A messenger arrived and was escorted to the library. In a matter of moments he was running back out of the door as William’s shouts were heard.

“We are travelling to Italy directly. Have our trunks packed for six months.”

The household was a hive of activity whilst Gabriella’s and William’s belongings were folded and laid in huge oak trunks. All the while Gabriella was not allowed to leave her rooms and could only speculate on William’s instructions.

With two carriages packed Gabriella was escorted to one whilst William rode in the other. Even when he walked past her carriage window, he did not look in or speak to her. The journey would be long but fortunately, she was allowed to have Maryann accompany her. The young woman showed such dedication to her mistress and Gabriella had grown fond of her maid during the previous months. Maryann’s experience had  shown her that Gabriella’s sickness was caused by her being with child and the two women became close in the secret for a time.

Gabriella’s hand smoothed over her corseted belly her mind troubled. Whose child was it? Surely not William’s after that brutal act by the fireside. If the child was Arthur’s she would be happy to carry it but if William suspected he was not the father there was no knowing what he was capable of.

The journey was indeed long and arduous but Gabriella kept her spirits up by thinking of the moment she would see Arthur again. Maryann was as excited as she was with all the new outlooks and vistas, the different foods and the sounds of foreign tongues. After several weeks stopping at various inns at night and travelling in the heat of the day they arrived at a hilltop villa. The view indeed was spectacular and the villa itself a fine building.

“Tell your mistress she can choose her rooms from any at the back of the villa. I will reside in the fore quarters.”

“William…?”

“Tell your mistress I do not require her presence at my table and certainly do not want to see her during our stay here.”

Gabriella could only watch William stride toward the gardens. Deep inside she was glad he would not touch her but was concerned as to his motives. She walked with Maryann to the rear of the villa and choose rooms on the eastern side over looking an olive grove. With the unpacking done and a light supper eaten she decided to stroll in the garden. The evening air was still warm but a light breeze cooled her skin pleasantly. She had been disappointed when Arthur did not appear to greet them but maybe he would arrive in the morning.

My questions are –

a) Do you get a sense of era?

b) Did the excerpt intrigue you?

c) Would you continue to read?

d) What changes should I make?

e) Should I expand this section?

Mother’s Day, Memories and a Prompt…

May 9, 2014
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This Sunday is Mother’s Day (or Mothering Sunday) in Canada as well as other parts of the world. However, it is not recognized globally on the same day. For example Mother’s Day was celebrated on mother-and-child-30th March in England. When I investigated the reasons behind having a different date dependant on which part of the globe we resided, I was surprised to find that there are several dates throughout the year. Many have been linked historically to religious celebrations. (See link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mother’s_Day) No matter which date it is celebrated it is still a celebration to recognize the person who nurtured you.

The deep connection a mother feels for her children is never lost, whether those children are young or adult, they are always ‘my baby’. The umbilical cord maybe cut physically but never in an emotional way. As a mother, I am fiercely protective of my children and love them unconditionally, even though they are grown (one has left home!)  I know within my heart they are bound to me and always will be.

Even if your Mother is no longer in the physical world, their legacy of love continues – think of it as an echo of their loving protection always present within and around you. I will walk in the garden on Sunday to remember my Mother, who loved gardening and I know she will be with me in spirit. I will also  enjoy moments with my children as we enjoy a meal together and I can be as soppy as I like.

Quotes:

No language can express the power, and beauty, and heroism, and majesty of a mother’s love. It shrinks not where man cowers, and grows stronger where man faints, and over wastes of worldly fortunes sends the radiance of its quenchless fidelity like a star. ~Edwin Hubbell Chapin

Mother love is the fuel that enables a normal human being to do the impossible. ~Marion C. Garretty

Grown don’t mean nothing to a mother. A child is a child. They get bigger, older, but grown? What’s that suppose to mean? In my heart it don’t mean a thing. ~Toni Morrison

A mom reads you like a book, and wherever she goes, people read you like a glowing book review. ~Robert Brault

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Today’s prompt is to write something about your Mother. It can be a memory, a phrase, a distintive feature – honor her and love her.

My Mother was an intelligent, loving and hard working woman, who loved all her children and grandchildren with a deep, unrelenting and all encompassing fierceness. She was the glue that kept the family together and her legacy lives on within us. I know she and my Father continue to love us and are present in spirit – their love is too strong not to be.

http://www.worldliteraturetoday.org/world-mothers#.U2-SDvldWO1

Changes…

October 10, 2012
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As the old saying goes ‘nothing stays the same’ and the last few weeks have made that quite apparent in my life. Each event has made an impact on me both emotionally and physically. My oldest child flew the nest and is making a new life with his girlfriend in a very nice apartment.  As a natural worrier, I am tending to bounce back and forth between being happy that he has made this transition so successfully to being anxious that he will struggle. Is it only mothers that do this? His girlfriend is a delightful young woman and it is obvious they are very happy together…but that mother/ child bond is never truly broken. I know I will have to curb my contact and ‘interference’ – thank goodness for texts!

Another event has seen my daughter change schools due to conflicts at the previous one. Again I have bounced between anger and frustration to swelling with pride that she made a decision that was slightly unpopular but has proven to be positive.  In fact she has the option of finishing school faster with her option, which is an added bonus. Within moments of my son’s departure, my daughter commandeered the basement suite as her own space and has started planning the redecorating already.  We were washing walls and cleaning carpets the very next day.

Whatever challenges and changes life throws at us, we know in our hearts it is for the best in the long run but when we are in the midst of them, they sure are hard on the heart and body.

Are you facing changes at the moment?

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